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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While some
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 subscribe to the view that it is helpful that computers will be smarter than humankind, the opponents opine that
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 is disadvantageous. As far as I am concerned, the latter idea makes more sense and
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 essay discusses both these views. On the one hand, it is understandable why some
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 conviction that it will be very useful if computers are wiser than humanity because advancements to computer technology would create more convenience in life
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 as health care. By
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 I mean, technology could quickly find measurements and
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 treat different types of illnesses, which once used to be very hard or time-consuming. A good illustration of
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 is that, with the invention of medical
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, a multitude of patients with lethal cancers have been cured and
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 allows
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 to have better health conditions and makes human’s life expectancy longer.
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 that it is detrimental when computers are more intelligent than mankind since the advent of artificial intelligence would make human labourers redundant. To be more specific, that
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 various human works would lessen the need for employees in basic jobs. A prime example would be that advanced technologies
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 workers.
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, technology development would make
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 lazier or become overdependent on it.
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,
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 would do all the stuff like
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, shopping, etc, which would lead to obesity and inactivity. From my experience, more and more children are becoming
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 and tend to not go out because of the invention of VR games. To recapitulate, while it is apparent some
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 find that
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 smarter than humanity beneficial, there are justifiable grounds for Advocating the notion that it is actually an adverse development in terms of finding work and the laziness it brings.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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