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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
 have different views about the advantage of
computers
 being smarter than human beings. Personally, I believe that
this
 will be a positive development for the world. On the one hand, there are various reasons why
people
 think it is a disadvantage for humans to have
such
 superior technology. They may assert that these machines may lose control and become violent.
This
 fact might stem from the plot of some sci-fi movies, which often make us have a negative view of advanced technology.
Besides
 that, the reason for
this
 avoidance is that they do not have enough trust in artificial intelligence.
People
 may assume that these machines might give the wrong results
,
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 or easy hack.
This
 is because they do not fully understand how the algorithms of these software work and they have barely worked with incredibly smart
computers
 before.
On the other hand
, I still believe that it is a positive development. From a personal perspective, supercomputers can bring the world’s residents a lot of advantages.
For example
, the ability to calculate billions of algorithms in just an hour of these machines has helped scientists develop the appropriate COVID-19 vaccine within a year. From the societal level, more kinds of jobs will be created because
computers
 may take over some occupations. A wide range of fields can ensure that residents won’t be jobless and that more aspects of the original fields will be scrutinised. In
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summary
summer
,
although
 many
people
 think that smart
computers
 are a negative development, I still believe that it is an optimistic future and
people
 should welcome new changes approaching.
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