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Education in financial Management should be a mandatory component of school program. To what extent you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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Including financial management as a required subject in the
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 curriculum has always been a topic of debate. It is well-known that the economic condition of
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 has a direct impact on their lives since an indebted life contributes to the increased level of stress.
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, I totally agree that personal finance should be taught in schools from the
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 grade.
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, if children start learning how to deal with
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 from a younger age, throughout games
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, when they became adults it will be easier to manage their own personal finances.
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, educating adolescents on how to save and invest
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 for their retirement is essential to reduce the poverty level of the elderly.
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, here in ,Brazil only 5% of
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 will retire with the same income they have as workers. Another reason why personal finances should be implemented at schools is that the lack of financial knowledge has painful consequences for the country's growth. As long as
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 are not aware of how to lead with
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, countries are likely to have more
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 in debt than
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 with financial reserves.
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, the number of individuals who need the monetary support of the government will be bigger
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 when they are unemployed,
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, they probably do not have
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 to survive. In conclusion, teaching financial management as a core subject at school is vital for the overall development of
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. In my opinion, financial education could be a powerful tool for children to learn the value of
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 and make smart financial decisions when they are adults.
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