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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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The given chart illustrates
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 of vehicle trips into the city centre completed by residents and non-residents in a span of nine
years
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. Overall, it is clear that a part of the population living in a city, in the
first
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 couple of
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, made significantly more trips than those, who live outside of the megapolis. Albeit, later on, the
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 abruptly dropped. As in for non-residents the figure rose steadily but plunged at the end. In 1996,
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 average
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 of journeys made per day by locals was about 10,000. Throughout four
years
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, it fluctuated gently, when an abrupt fall occurred in
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year
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 2000
,
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 when parking meters were introduced into the city. Whereas, trips made by outsiders showed a pattern of increasing in those
years
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, reaching
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 peak in 1999.
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year
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 2000 natives did not portray any precipitous rise. In
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 2004, the numbers hit the low of approximately 3,500. Meanwhile, after reaching its highest point, the
number
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 of car journeys completed by non-residents levelled off and
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 declined sharply in
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year
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 2003 when two streets were closed due to traffic.
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 the end, both parties’
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 was lower compared to the start.
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