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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

#people #sites #facebook #impact #individuals #society
The given chart illustrates
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number
 of vehicle trips into the city centre completed by residents and non-residents in a span of nine
years
. Overall, it is clear that a part of the population living in a city, in the
first
 couple of
years
, made significantly more trips than those, who live outside of the megapolis. Albeit, later on, the
number
 abruptly dropped. As in for non-residents the figure rose steadily but plunged at the end. In 1996,
an
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 average
number
 of journeys made per day by locals was about 10,000. Throughout four
years
, it fluctuated gently, when an abrupt fall occurred in
year
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 2000
,
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 when parking meters were introduced into the city. Whereas, trips made by outsiders showed a pattern of increasing in those
years
, reaching
its
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 peak in 1999.
Moreover
, from
year
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 2000 natives did not portray any precipitous rise. In
year
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 2004, the numbers hit the low of approximately 3,500. Meanwhile, after reaching its highest point, the
number
 of car journeys completed by non-residents levelled off and
then
 declined sharply in
year
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 2003 when two streets were closed due to traffic.
At
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 the end, both parties’
number
 was lower compared to the start.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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