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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.  What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Today’s world challenges with several problems related to the global warming issue, which leads to the
rise
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sea
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 becoming more serious than
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 before. Some solutions will be given to
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 problem.
Sea
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rise
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 is one of the most severe impacts of global warming due to melting glaciers and thermal expansion of
water
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, which threats small-island nations and coastal regions. Glaciers and ice sheets have been melting for some decades, because of human activities which lead to a continuous
rise
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 of
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 in our blue planet.
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global
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warning
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warming
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  has
effected
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this
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 areas which does not allow
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change
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 to their solid phase. Another driver of
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sea level
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rise
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 is
thermal
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the thermal
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 expansion of
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; as the ocean warms seawater
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 less dense and expands. All of
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this factor
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 leads to
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 problems for human kinds in some islands and
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costal
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 region.  Global warming,
that
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 leads to the
continues
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 rising of
sea
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 levels will, not stop unless some measures
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 as consuming renewable energy as well as protecting forests reduce the amount of
carbon
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 dioxide and other greenhouse gases on the planet. Shifting the ways we make and use energy can be a good way to address
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 issue.
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, imposing
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 tax on
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 dioxide can force factories and power stations to use solar and wind power.
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Similarly
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these kind
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 of taxes
encourage
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 people to change their cars with electric ones. Another solution
which
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 directly
effect
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 on
amount
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 of greenhouse gases is maintaining forests which their trees store
carbon
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 dioxide through photosynthesis and store it as
carbon
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 in their wood.
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 planting more trees and stopping deforestation can have a huge impact on the problem of global warming, and its consequences. One of the most important environmental
problem
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 which is related to
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the human
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human kind
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humankind
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 future is global warming and its consequences
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 as rising
water
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 levels, which can
be address
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 if drastic measures
taken
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are taken
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 by people on the earth.
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