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People in big cities are facing many healthy challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What cause air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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Air
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pollution
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 has come one of the most controversially serious problems across the world and has affected community’s health in many big
cities
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. In
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 essay, I will give some possible causes of
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pollution
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, and
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 will suggest some ideas to solving
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problem
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.
Air
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pollution
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 can be caused by several factors. One of the important reasons for
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 pollutions is the increase in private transportation in big
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,
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 as, motorbikes and cars, that dispose of a large amount of carbon dioxide and other dangerous gases which lead to
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 contamination. Another element is releasing
pollution
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 from big factories which is more popular in
cities
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 of developing countries
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 because they are not required to follow a rule.
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, the number of people living in big
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 has become more, so the amount of discharge in wastes and rubbish
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 increased that could produce greenhouse gases into the
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. There are some measures that governments and individuals can take to deal with
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 issue.
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, governments could implement strict regulations for monitoring the disposal of waste in industrial factories.
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, individuals can decrease the use of private transportation types
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 as motorbikes, cars by using public vehicles, bicycles and
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 green energy sources to replace fossil energy sources in order to reduce greenhouse gas emissions. In conclusion,
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pollution
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 is still a critical
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 in many big
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 throughout the world and
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problem
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 is caused by different factors. If governments and people play their roles properly,
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problem
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 will be tackled.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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