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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source #majority
It had never been easier than these days to keep
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oneself
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 of
news
 by just clicking a
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button
in
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 a personal computer or a mobile cell phone , thanks for the amazing internet which invaded our lives and could replace newspapers once and
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for ever
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.
Thus
, I totally disagree that classic newspaper still maintaining its historical role as a
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chief
 source of
news
 in the era of the novel technology of information. On one hand, the rhythm of our daily life is becoming faster and faster
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everyday
, and it is extremely rare nowadays to come across the old
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scenery
 of a businessperson enjoying a cup of coffee while reading the newspaper and
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checking
 the ups and downs of the stock market,
instead
 he or she will be having a free mobile cell phone application that
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 text messaging the latest market
news
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 single minute.
Furthermore
, most of us are concerned about
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forcasting
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forecasting
 , and by surfing the internet or simply by
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yor
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your
 cell phone your plans
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 the day might be changed according to the weather expectations which pop off showing
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 on the screen.
On the other hand
, newspapers are not environmentally friendly and they have to give
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place
 to electronic devices . For each five paper pages,
for instance
, there would be at least one tree that had been removed ,
also
 there would be a considerable amount of toxic materials spelt into
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agricultural land or into a
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drinking
 water.
Subsequently
, by
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refraining
 from using the classic
newspapers
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 we will be helping
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nature to keep clean and saving the environment. To sum up, electronic devices provided
news
 is a fast, trustful, and environmentally friendly source of information , and it is the time to say
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farewell
 to the classic and archaic
newspapaer
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newspaper
.
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