It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is a common trend among people to have a luxurious and furnished

house

; Pouring money for its interior and exterior look. It is very costly to take care and refurbish the existing properties, Whilst rather than

this

sum should be consumed on making latest living places. I totally disagree with

this

elucidation because it involves over cost and massive problems in terms of moving to the new site.

To begin

with,

Why

Rephrase

apply

show examples

I oppose

this

statement that cash should be spent on brand new habitation.

This

is

due to

high

Correct article usage

the high

show examples

budget

needs

Wrong verb form

needed

show examples

for

this

task. Since every person can not afford to purchase land and

then

make an apartment.

Moreover

Add a comma

Moreover,

show examples

due to

huge

Correct article usage

the huge

show examples

enlargement in the

population

Add a comma

population,

show examples

the territory becomes less,

As a result

buying

the

Correct article usage

a

show examples

house

's land in an urban area is hard like travelling to Mar. To cite an example,

According to

my ,,

country

Change noun form

country's

show examples

local media report more than 60% public

are

Correct subject-verb agreement

is

show examples

keener

Replace the word

keen

show examples

to renovate their houses.

In addition

, The other reason against

this

notion is that money should be spent on new architecture,

This

is because shifting to a new location brings many issues. Given that, people are used to the old area and if they are moving to a new place it affects their lives negatively to some extent like furniture shifting, adjustment to a new environment,

markets

Fix the agreement mistake

market

show examples

distance etc.

Furthermore

, It will upset their

children

Change noun form

children's

show examples

education because they will deal with the new school's syllabus. To illustrate, Me and my other siblings are happier in their native town rather than in a city.

To sum up

,

Why

Rephrase

apply

show examples

I support

this

statement that renovation of the existing living flat is far better than building a fresh

house

.

This

is because it is too expensive and may cause many problems.

To given

Change preposition

Given

show examples

this

situation, it seems that

instead

of paying huge amounts for a new

house

, People should spend that money on starting businesses and for their

teens

Change noun form

teen's

teens'

show examples

quality education.