In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Unemployment is a growing concern in many countries with a lot of highly qualified
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unable to find work.
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is because the
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is underequipped to provide employment to all the
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and with new technologies coming in every day there is constant pressure for the
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to up-skill them all the time. In many countries, the
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has no proper method to streamline the employment process. The procedure to apply for a
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job is very lengthy and difficult .
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is one of the reasons why a lot of
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choose to work in private companies despite the uncertainty with their job.
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might be difficult to implement in countries like India/China where the population is very high and the
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cannot create
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a high volume of jobs, it is definitely not impossible. Another reason for severe unemployment is technological advancements. We are forced to learn and level up our skills at all times. Because of ,
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there is heavy competition among the
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and the company’s like Google and Facebook are always looking out for very highly skilled candidates thereby setting a skill benchmark in the industry. Every company adapts to
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benchmark
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making a lot of
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unemployed. In my opinion, the only way to resolve
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is by creating ample jobs in both
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and private sectors and having the same selection and interview process. The companies
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should start establishing the relevant skillset required for a particular job so that the
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focus and learn to master the niche skill.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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