Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are most successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In contemporary times,
money
is a measure of success. It is a common belief that successful people
are the ones who make a lot
of money
, while there is an argument that people
who contribute positively to society
like teachers and scientists are most successful. In my opinion, both views have their own arguments and the following essay will clarify it.
On one hand, people
who can earn a lot
of money
are indeed successful people
because being good at making money
also
means they have knowledge or talent. Billionaires are successful because they generate huge incomes and can create the best conditions for themselves and their families. For instance
, they can have the best services, go shopping comfortably without worry and also
have the ability to help society
. So having a lot
of money
will successfully give people
an abundant life with good things.
On the other hand
, people
who have a lot
of dedication to society
succeed because they can bring many achievements of spiritual value. Scientists and teachers who discover and impart knowledge to others. They succeed when they leave valuable lessons and treasures of knowledge to people
. Besides
, the contributors also
bring irreplaceable spiritual values. However
, that doesn't mean they can make a lot
of money
because there are a lot
of scientists who spend their whole life doing research but until they die their research is recognized and obviously they don't get paid.
In conclusion, while it is understandable that people
who contribute to society
are really successful when leaving many achievements, I am advocating for those who earn a lot
of money
are the most successful because they can create a good life for themselves and their families.Submitted by jakedth162 on
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