Some people say that music is good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,

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have different views about singing playing a significant role in bringing individuals of various experience and

ages

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together or not. I think

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, it seems that musical way is considered the significant thing to get population together, it is unimportant way collecting nation together who have not same practice and

ages

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. On the one hand, there is no musical language for anyone so that family of every country can listen to any

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, which the lyrics are not understanding for everyone. Most importantly,

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the piece

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is unlimited in order that

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can gain some knowledge and broaden their horizons by listening to different types of country

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, if a person listens to the “Mugam” that national tune kind of Azerbaijan,

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person will be aware of the culture of Azerbaijan. Listening to

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soul is not only a good way for getting

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of different fashion but

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ages

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together.

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, listening to rock is vitally necessary for individuals and it brings folk to the same thinking whose ability and

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are different.

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, other types of countries have different art and between older citizens and youngsters have huge musical differences and because of these reasons to

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to listening

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the

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is not considered a vital role for bringing society together.

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means that

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most of the time older community have a tendency to listen to slow singing

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as classic or retro,

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young

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crowd are accustomed to listening to active singing like rock, jazz or rap.

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, if a character prefers to listen to

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as a

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result

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it will be difficult to get together other persons who tend to listen to rap opera. In conclusion, I believe even though

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plays a crucial role in the life of people to bring them to the same opinion whose art and

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are different, it is still substantial and undeniable by listening to music a body cannot get the same thinking.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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330 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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