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Around the world, children learn English as a second language at school. However, in some places, they also learn at kindergarten (pre-school care, when children are aged two to five). To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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In some countries,
children
 would learn
English
 as a
second
language
 at primary school, while in some parts of countries, juveniles started to learn
English
 before they turned five. Indeed mastering more than one
language
 is becoming an indispensable life skill due to globalization,
hence
 I strongly agree that kids should have started learning
English
 at an early age.
To begin
 with, effective learning is proven to likely happen at an early age due to rapid brain development. At
this
 stage,
children
 explore new things by copying and mimicking what adults say. To illustrate, teachers or parents would speak
English
 to communicate in a daily conversation without having to tell
children
 the meaning of each word or the theory behind it. Kids would naturally and gradually build their understanding of how to use the
language
 since they see the context on when and how to use certain expressions.
Additionally
, letting kids to acquiring a new
language
 since they were young would lead to less traumatizing learning. It is widely known that most
English
 subjects at school would have a final goal to assess
language
 ability through some paper tests.
However
,
children
 below five years old learn new things with curiosity as a trigger and their goal is to be able to communicate and understand what other people saying.
Hence
, they will internalize the learning process as a fun experience.
Finally
,
although
 some argue that teaching a
second
language
 since young would bring stress and unnecessary burden on
children
, they should remember that
this
 will not happen if the teaching method is designed correctly so that it will increase child curiosity. Allow the young generation to immerse the
language
 in daily context and provide a more suitable parameter to test other than paper exam would not bring pressure on the learning process. In conclusion, I believe with a good approach and learning method,
children
 are more than capable to learn a
second
language
 at an early age which in the end will bring benefits for their future-facing globalization.
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