In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Accommodation is one of the basic needs of human being around the world.
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, the perception of possessing a house works differently in different nations.
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, some cultures encourage owning an accommodation
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of living in a rented house. There are some possible reasons for
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viewpoint
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this
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could lead to several drawbacks which will be explained in my below essay.
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with, owning a home is encouraged in some cultures, especially Asian culture, for a few reasons: The
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reason is that houses and real estate are considered worthy immobile property which they could use for earning profits even after utilizing them for a long period. The
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cause for the Asians to desire
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home is
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because they are born in the long_term tradition that an offspring will be inherited
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prosperous
value from their parents, in which houses are considered most valuable item.
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, my friend told me that her mother_in_ law kept repeating that she would
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inherit
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her apartment
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the son who took care of her or she would sell it if her sons abandoned her.
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,
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perspective may result in unexpecting disadvantages. A kid who was born with
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spoon may discourage
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effort themselves because their parents would transfer all the prosperous possession to them in any
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.
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, there was a so_called Duke in Southern Vietnam in
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decade who possessed
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acres
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of field and kilograms of gold when his parents passed away,
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he
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did not
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know how to develop his heritage yet using them unpurposely, he died as a homeless as a consequence.
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, transferring valuable materials to the
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generation may be disadvantageous
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. In conclusion, homing possession is an existent viewpoint in some nations.
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there are several plausible causes, people should consider
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effects of
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inheriting
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, the most important possession a child should own is high-quality education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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