'There should be no legal age for drinking.' Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Consumption of alcohol has increased drastically around the world. Different countries have different laws on the upper

age

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limit to drink.Some believe that there should be no

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restricttion

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restriction

restrictions

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essay will discuss, why anyone below the

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of 18 should not be legally allowed to drink,as it may lead to

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in the

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rate and adversely affect their health.

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,people as young as 18 are not mature and can easily get into the wrong company.Because of their immaturity, the chances of them

comitting

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committing

crimes and getting on the wrong side of the law.

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,there was a shocking case of

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assault on a young woman by a gang of men.During

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,it was noticed that a young juvenile boy was

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apply

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part of

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assault.

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,

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person was drunk and not in his senses at the same

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crime

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.A

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of

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nature made the law increase the

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age-limit

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age limit

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for drinking.

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,it has

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that early drinking

deteoriate

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deteriorate

health in the later stages of life.According to a recent survey,liver cirrhosis and cancer is

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second

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biggest cause of

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worldwide.

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,one of the well-known

actress

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recently came out in the media about her

deteoriating

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deteriorating

health condition,citing the reason as regular consumption of alcohol from a very young

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.

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,keeping

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age

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the age

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limit should be strictly legalised in all

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countries. To conclude,Drinking has become a part of the culture globally.But there should be strict laws on the

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limit from which they can consume so as to decrease the

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rates of the countries as well as keep the younger generation healthy.