Your local council have asked locals some suggestions on how to keep the city safer. Write a letter to council. In the letter, you should: - explain what the council can do - what the people can do - tell how the community will benefit by keeping the city safe.

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Dear Sir or Madam, According to the survey which asked for some suggestions on improving the
city
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safer, I am writing
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to give you some recommendations.
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letter mentions
about
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what the council can do, what local communities can participate
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in, and
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what can be the advantages of having the
city
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safe.
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of all, lighting on the roads should be improved as soon as possible, and
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is what the council can do and give
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priority. As almost all criminal records in the
city
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occurred at night, particularly in the darker area near the
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Manhattan
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, the council can reduce
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rate by supporting children and teenagers
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education and places to live. Another factor
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is necessary to drive
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is drawing attention from the local people. Basically,
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people can avoid commuting alone at night.
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, by developing the
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, the community will gain several benefits.
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, they can feel more comfortable when travelling at night. Another good example is that people from
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city
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may want to live here because of
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the safety
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city
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. I look forward to seeing the improvement of the
city
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safe Sincerely, Jenny Chan

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