A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to let you know that I know you're going on a camping holiday

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summer for the very

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time at the place called Luis Lake in Central North America. I know that you will definitely

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to enjoy camping at Luis lake. As

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I had done camping at beautiful Luis Lake back in 2019. Let me tell you about some attractive locations nearby the place where you will going to attend. To be honest, a camping holiday has several disadvantages as well.

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, as we are living in Eastern North America, our current season is winter and Central North America has summer season going on right now. So, It is going to be a massive temperature change for our body which may lead to fever, cough or any other temporary problems. Well, I'm thinking about coming on

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camping holiday with you as I'm having a summer break at my University. Can't wait to meet you and do camping with you. Regards, Grishma

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

177 words

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