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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 with knowledge of fine arts are very rare to find. There are many beliefs that
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. Many argue that painting, poetry, music can be made by each and all. I completely extend support to
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 of
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 could not perform well.
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 of the sector. There is a saying, artists are god gifted. Thereby, some even with tremendous efforts do not succeed in the
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 they lack confidence and at the same time; music, sports, poetry, painting, are not given as
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 as other education in the school. In my view,
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 these areas as a main career and is mostly looked upon merely as a leisure activity. In conclusion,
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 would like to share my opinion that with general education, if
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 that it can be learned by all with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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