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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there has been
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 in reports of
health
 issues in younger generations. There is a raised concern that many of these are due to
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 number of overweight people. These
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result in affecting the countries
health
 care system. I strongly believe that the major reason behind
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 is lack of physical activity in day to day life.
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 these are results of modernisation. One of the sole
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 behind
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 in
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obesity
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 high dependency on technology in everything.
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grocery shopping. Even for the smallest need
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, there is now artificial intelligence which makes life easier but at the same time restricts body movement.
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 the eating habits and lifestyles are becoming more complex and unhealthy to meet with the
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 routine. In order to curb these challenges, there is an upsurge need to educate about the importance of exercise and fitness. I strongly believe that schools are the foundation pillar for building one's character.
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, imparting knowledge on increasing stamina and living a healthy life should be part of the school curriculum. To achieve
this
, teaching institutions should focus more on sports along with other subjects. In my conclusion, to reduce the
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related
 risk due to weight gain and to put
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 strain on
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education on
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 diseases and remediation measures should be taught at an early age. To end the
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 of my assessment of the situation, more emphasis should be provided on physical lessons in schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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