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1- Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extent do you agree

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The lives of
children
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 are being nurtured by
parents
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however
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 the education of parenting has to be done by
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 they need to teach good lessons, morals and ethics etc. to their
children
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 in contemplation of recognizing the worth of a person, people and humanity.
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 essay will discuss why the cradling of
kids
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 is important. In some cities, there is various kinds of upbringing way adolescent like
parents
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 have to take care of their teenagers because toddlers need to provide proper hospitality for better development in their childhood days.
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 some countries, France gave fathers of newborn babies training of fatherhood and developed their mindset respectively, to enhance their future improvisation. The little age of many
kids
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 needs to maintain their hygiene, safety, growth etc. Many guardians have the potential to manage their work-life balance and raise their cherubs.
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, many
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 are unable to manage the nurturing of babies.
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, the
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 have to attend the parenting route in order to increase the skills, patience, pampering
kids
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, discipline etc. Training is given to
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 for all phases of
children
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's lives, how to tackle all the problems and work which they need in the proper development of their legacies. There are mainly four types of parenting Authoritarian or Disciplinarian, permissive or Indulgent, uninvolved and authoritative. In conclusion, I would suggest every parent must involve in training which
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 beneficial related to nourishing, development of raising
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, in order to be happy in life with their
kids
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. Every child has the ability to adapt easily
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 in their childhood which is given by their
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