International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to move and more tourist. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages?

International trips are becoming cheaper and counties open their doors for more and more
of
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tourists
. I believe that
this
tourism
boom has more benefits than many disadvantages. There are many advantages,
for instance
,
tourism
can lead to these consequences,
such
as land clearing, but there are
also
disadvantages in
tourism
and they play
significant
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role
for
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instance,
tourism
is increased costs,
enrirental
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risk and disruption of socio-economic and
culture
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conditions and recourses. In my
opinion
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the most important advantage
that
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boom
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in
tourism
led to the emergence of millions of new jobs and an increase
economic
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in economic
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prosperity in
countries
around the world.
Tourism
has a large and important impact on the
countries
economy
,
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because
economic
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component of the country significantly increased.
This
money received from
tourists
can invest in the development of the
countries
infrastructure and in other
industry
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industries
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.
Also
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it expands the contributions to the
countries
payment balance develops the spheres of
world
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economy in the economic sphere.
Moreover
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tourism
helps to employ many people because the
tourism
industry has a very branched network.
Also
in
this
industry,
labor
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is mainly not mechanized, which follows to attract
labor
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resources and guide them to the maintenance of
tourists
. These
tourism
factors are almost the main component of the economic prosperity of
countries
.
Bur
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there are disadvantages of
tourism
.
For example
, disruption of culture and recourses. It can be caused by vandalism, littering and illegal export of
culture
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heritage and due to
this
, the economic and social factors of the country are deteriorating. Destruction of cultural conditions associated with vandalism. Some
tourist
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tourists
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spoil monuments, litter in nature, namely in the oceans, rivers and maybe on the mountains, which
also
harms nature. In conclusion,
although
a negative component is present in
tourism
for the
countries
but
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it is not very significant that advantages of the
tourism
,
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because a large number of
tourists
helps the development and prosperity of the economy in the
countries
and
also
it helps to increase workplace for people.
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