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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that government have a duty to construct
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railway
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lines
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 in
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 to accelerate the
transportation
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systems
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 between cities. In my strong belief, I would contend it is obligatory to add new
railway
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lines
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 to municipal
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 that are debated about it in
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 essay. On one hand, cities especially
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megacities cities
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 face overpopulation which is disastrous.
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, the government must take reasonable and fundamental action like making a change in
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systems
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.
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, in London with a population of over 5 million, people have a serious problem
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travel another
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 due to the lack of fast trains.
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 they were waiting for hours and on some occasions for some days.
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, the government decided to construct hundreds of
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lines
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 to solve
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 problem.
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, in
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 to boom the economy of a
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, it is reasonable to increase the level of tourism in that
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. So, if the
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systems
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 are weak and irregular, people do not tend to have a trip to that
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.
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, Madrid gains more than 20 million dollars from tourist attractions because they added numerous fast trains in
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 to facilitate transport. In conclusion, in
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lines
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 on moving fast from a
city
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 to another
city
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 were evaluated. In my point of view, it is better to promote the level of
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systems
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 like a fast train in
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 to boom the economy as well as respond to the primary need of megacity.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Modernization
  • Efficiency
  • Congestion
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Preservation
  • Incremental improvement
  • Reliability
  • State-of-the-art
  • Futuristic design
  • Rural connectivity
  • Maintenance
  • Legacy systems
  • Strategic investment
  • Feasibility study
  • Public opinion
  • Eco-friendly
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Accessibility
  • Innovation
  • Heritage
  • Urbanization
  • Public-private partnership
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