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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadventages?

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The bar chart provides information about the
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 that are made by five mobile companies internationally from 2009 to 2013. Units are measured in numbers. Overall, Samsung and Nokia share a major global market when compared to other companies like
Apple
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, LS, and
ZTE
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.
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,
ZTE
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 was the lowest of all.
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, Samsung mobiles
sales
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 were around 225 in 2009 and has a steady growth in
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 over the
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 two years with (approximately 310 in 2011)
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, their
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 reached a peak in 2013 on almost 450 and it was the highest of all other mobile companies.
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, In 2009, Nokia mobile
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 are almost similar to that of Samsung in 2013
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 approximately 440.
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, their mobile
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 are gradually decreased globally and reached around 420 in 2011 and remains at 250 in 2013, which is the lowest all years in Nokia
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.
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,
Apple
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, LG and
ZTE
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 shares almost similar global share, But
Apple
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 phones
sales
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 are higher compared to the other.
Apple
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 mobile
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 were around 25 in 2009 which is the lowest in all years and increased gradually
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, reaching 150 in 2013. Over the period, the
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 of LG phones are gradually reduced from around 120 in 2009 to 85 in 2013. From 2009-2013, the
ZTE
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 mobile phones
sales
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 were remains steady
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 around 50-60.
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