It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Few say that
cars
and Government Use synonyms
buses
should not be allowed in the urban centres and only Use synonyms
bicycles
be permitted. Use synonyms
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essay completely agrees with Linking Words
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statement because banning four-wheelers and Government-sponsored bus services from operating inside Linking Words
city
centres will decrease Use synonyms
air
pollution and using Use synonyms
bicycles
in place Use synonyms
of
them will lead to less congested Change preposition
apply
roads
.
On the one hand, most of the pollutants which render Use synonyms
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air
unhealthy are released by Use synonyms
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,
and Remove the comma
apply
buses
operated by Use synonyms
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authorities.Restricting their entry inside Use synonyms
city
centres will increase the quality of Use synonyms
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. Use synonyms
This
will lead to fewer diseases like lung cancers and other respiratory ailments.Linking Words
For example
, as per one study published in The Times of India.The Linking Words
air
quality index of Hyderabad, a Use synonyms
city
in south India was improved significantly after prohibiting the entry of Use synonyms
cars
and government Use synonyms
buses
into the Charminar and its surroundings which is the centre of Hyderabad.
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On the other hand
, promoting the use of Linking Words
bicycles
results in reduced traffic on Use synonyms
city
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roads
because the fewer big vehicles like Use synonyms
buses
and Use synonyms
cars
on the Use synonyms
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the more free the Use synonyms
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will be.Use synonyms
This
will lead Linking Words
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residents and students to reach their offices and schools on time. Use synonyms
For example
, in the UAE people travel to their offices and schools from far distances to save on house rent and during peak hours in the morning the Linking Words
roads
from the Emirate of Sharjah towards the Emirate of Dubai are filled with heavy traffic.Use synonyms
However
, after banning Linking Words
cars
and Use synonyms
buses
from these Use synonyms
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, the congestion on Use synonyms
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was reduced during these peak hoursUse synonyms
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apply
also
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In conclusion, a ban on Linking Words
cars
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buses
results in more healthy Use synonyms
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air
and using Use synonyms
bicycles
will make Use synonyms
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centre Use synonyms
roads
less congested.Use synonyms
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