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It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such is a development outweigh its advantages?

#world #car #tv #fridge #development
The graphic depicts elephant population distribution in nine Asian nations between 1997 and 2004. Overall, India had the most
elephants
 in both
years
, despite the fact that the total
number
 of
elephants
 fell precipitously during
this
 time. According to the data, around 10000
elephants
 inhabited India during its peak, but
this
number
 has now decreased to nearly 7500 in just seven
years
. Myanmar had the
second
-highest
number
 of
elephants
, with about 5000, compared to China's 1000
elephants
 in 1997. In both nations, their numbers have plummeted, with just 500
elephants
 observed in China in 2004. Malaysia and Sri Lanka both had roughly 3000
elephants
, but the former's population has plummeted to less than 1000 in just seven
years
. Around a thousand
elephants
 lived in Vietnam and Laos, and the
number
 stayed the same in Laos. Cambodia, with over a thousand
elephants
, was the only area where the elephant population rose.
Finally
, Thailand used to have over 4,000
elephants
, but that
number
 has decreased to
little
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 over a thousand in just seven
years
.
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