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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While people think their
kids
 need to study at
school
, others believe the
home
school
 is the best way for their children.
This
 essay will analyze both sides of the argument before reaching my opinions.
Home
school
 give some children freedom for learning.
Kids
 can choose the subject that they want to learn at the moment.
In addition
,
kids
 know what are their interests quicker than
kids
 at
school
.
For example
, they love painting they can paint. In my view,
kids
 who have time and space to learn what they want; have less anxiety than others.
On the other hand
, studying at
academy
Correct article usage
an academy
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 makes
kids
 study
in particular
 with the main subject
such
 as mathematics or science, but
kids
also
 have a social skills experience more than
home
school
kids
. They know how to make new friends, and playing outside with another is the way to develop life skills.
Furthermore
,
kids
 are confident when they have to be in public.
For example
, my niece is at an age for
school
, due to the Covid situation made she struck at
home
 with her grandparents who do not acknowledge teaching their niece. That makes me know that
home
school
 will succeed if parents acknowledge that it could support their children in learning various subjects each day to avoid repeatedly learning subjects. In conclusion, to compare with
home
school
kids
 and students at
academy
Add an article
the academy
show examples
, leaning at
home
 make them feel relax and freedom than going to
school
.
Also
, they can find passion in their life.
However
, going to
school
 let them have an experience with another and improve their social skill for living.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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