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🔶The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007. 🔸Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (The photo is in the next post.)

🔶The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007. 🔸Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (The photo is in the next post.)
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A glance at the maps provided reveals the developmental changes which took place in
the
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Lynnfield
town
 during the period from 1936 until 2007.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps illustrates a significant transformation in
this
 city. As shown in the figure, in the year 1936 there was a river in the northeast of the
town
, but during the
next
 following years, it was completely altered
to
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 an enormous residential district.
Moreover
, with regard to the two maps, the travel agency was replaced by a florist in the vicinity of the bank
as well as
 a shopping centre was constructed in the vacant region in the centre of
town
 in 2007.
In contrast
, during the period
of
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from
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 1936 until 2007, the farmland was cleared totally and converted into the golf course which was located in the southeastern of
this
 city.
Further
 developments were the building of government offices
were
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 changed to the museum which was situated in
next
 to the golf course
as well as
 the cycling route in the southwest of the
town
become
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 a road for commuting of residents.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, next".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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