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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news.

#work #company #friend #jobs #job #news
Dear Sumon, Thanks for your kind advice and interest related to my new
job
 at J&J. About the
job
 changing issue, my
last
job
 role was a bit boring for me as I did
this
 sort
tedious
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job
 before, where accuracy matters the most and reporting to the management about the company’s
performance
, but
this
 new
job
 role will help me to explore my analytical capability for sure. In my new
job
, I will be analysing
reported
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the reported
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performance
 of my company and how the key
performance
 indicators have
affected
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 due to
this
performance
.
In addition
, I had to analyse the relationship between the key
performance
 indicators and
business
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the business
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 environment.Analysing
this
 relationship of business is very important for my new company due to volatility in the economic environment. My personal life is
also
 changing drastically as my mother is pushing me to get married soon
with
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 her friend’s daughter. My dad and mum are doing well health-wise. How
is
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are
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 your family and kids doing? Waiting for your response at your earliest. Your friend Tushar
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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