n many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion?

In many countries, they have a
nessesity
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necessity
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new residences, but the space that
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enough to erect them is in rural areas. It is argued that in
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, accommodations should not be built. I completely agree with
this
view. To start with, if we build some buildings for residents in
countryside
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, its environment will be
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undoubtedly
damaged.
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, during construction, it will have noise pollution and emit greenhouse gas
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