Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Other however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are debatable views about whether it is better to have standard punishments for each type of

crime

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or to consider more about other factors or circumstances before

commiting

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committing

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crime

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a crime

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. In my opinion, both have numerous advantages and drawbacks,

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, I strongly believe that judgment after considerations about reasons behind

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is a wiser choice and I will support my view elaborately in

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essay. On one hand, there is a group of individuals who support the idea of imposing fixed retributions because of various reasons.

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of all, one of the most

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substantial

benefits of fixed punishments is

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save

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a lot of time for the trial.

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, standardized laws make court

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faster and more efficient since the judges do not have to waste time considering

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factors.

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, these type of

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regulations

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is the possible way to save money not only for the government but

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for the victim’s families. Since offenders will be released after receiving retributions, the government can save money for other expenditures of the country and the victim’s family use less of their budgets to hire lawyers or for transportation.

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, these rules

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too primitive to be applied in

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modern world nowadays.

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, many people who kill someone because of self-defence do not deserve to be

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classified

into the same category as other killers.

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, it is believed that every

crime

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should be considered

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elaborately

before making

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because of its positive impacts.

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, flexible

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are thought to be more equal, compassionate and humane. The judge has to weigh in the gravity of the

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such

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as motivation, plan,… of the criminals to come up with suitable punishment which

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the fair trial for

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particular

circumstance.

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, there are more and more crimes

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without any intence or criminals were forced to do it to protect themselves are their families,

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, it is necessary to judge crimes differently

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of applying the same punishment.

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these kind

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this kind

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of laws can easily prone to bribery and corruption since rich offenders can hire good lawyers, can pay the judges or investigators for

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period

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of jail or lighter retributions. In conclusion, there are

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still

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different arguments about which punishments are better to be applied

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because

both have positive and negative influences. In my point of view, I still firmly agree that

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system must consider and follow the different

procedure

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for each case before giving punishment.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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411 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fixed punishments
consistency
predictability
deter crime
potential offenders
streamline
judicial process
bias
corruption
complexity
human behavior
circumstances
justice system
intent
remorse
socio-economic background
rehabilitate offenders
recidivism rates
flexible punishment systems
inconsistencies
perceived injustices
public trust

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