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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #city
In the salad days
the
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 millennium, society is divided into two groups almost equally regarding the notion that some individuals imagine horizontal
city
 it is the best to live others imagine of a vertical
city
. Different
people
 have distinct mindsets. The following paragraph would shed light on both approaches before making the final note. To commence with the
first
 nation there are many myriad things to be shared in its favour
first
 and foremost horizontal any place looking good
,
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 because the horizontal
area
 is square. In the horizontal
city
 is best for living, houses are easily built on a horizontal
area
.
Secondly
, a horizontal
city
 is perfect for farming because
this
area
 is fully flat.
As a result
, in the flat
area
 is growing fast, because their road is plain and
people
 easily walk on the road. But others
people
 think
vertical
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city
 is far better than
horizontal
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the horizontal
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city
. Well, Vertical
city
 looks amazing,
also
 a vertical
city
 like a mountain. Lots of
people
 like to visit hills. But some problems have in a vertical
city
,
firstly
 wealing problem,
people
 do not move and walk easily. The vertical places are not good for playgrounds. Horizontal is suitable for playing all sports. having discussed the arguments and counter-arguments would like to infer that both are good is
ondepend
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on depend
depend
 o which
people
 like to live. ,Well different
people
 have different minds. My opine horizontal
city
 is better to live, if
i
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 like to live
i
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 will be a choice horizontal
city
,
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 because
this
city
 is a good place to play sports and walking.
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