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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the salad days
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 millennium, society is divided into two groups almost equally regarding the notion that some individuals imagine horizontal
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 it is the best to live others imagine of a vertical
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. Different
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 have distinct mindsets. The following paragraph would shed light on both approaches before making the final note. To commence with the
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 nation there are many myriad things to be shared in its favour
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 and foremost horizontal any place looking good
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 because the horizontal
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 is square. In the horizontal
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 is best for living, houses are easily built on a horizontal
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.
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, a horizontal
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 is perfect for farming because
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 is fully flat.
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, in the flat
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 is growing fast, because their road is plain and
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 easily walk on the road. But others
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 think
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city
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 is far better than
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city
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. Well, Vertical
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 looks amazing,
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 a vertical
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 like a mountain. Lots of
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 like to visit hills. But some problems have in a vertical
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,
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 wealing problem,
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 do not move and walk easily. The vertical places are not good for playgrounds. Horizontal is suitable for playing all sports. having discussed the arguments and counter-arguments would like to infer that both are good is
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 like to live. ,Well different
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 have different minds. My opine horizontal
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 is better to live, if
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 like to live
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 will be a choice horizontal
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,
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 because
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 is a good place to play sports and walking.
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