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‘Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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The parent plays an important role in everyone's life. There is no doubt about it,
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 why many people believe that
children
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 should spend all of their
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 with their families. But everything has a flip side, so I will discuss both the advantages and the disadvantages of the issue. The good side of spending all of your free
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 with your family is
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 evident. Due to
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 times, family members are more connected, love and understand each other better. If these things had occurred, domestic violence
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 as domestic abuse wouldn't have taken place, and many
children
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 who witnessed abuse would no longer have suffered
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 a lack of love.
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 that's good, it
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 presents many potential hazards if
children
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 are not exposed to the outside world. Having all your free
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 spent with your family makes them lonely and possibly turns them into "lonely"
children
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. The lack of contact with outsiders and only familiar family members will partially create fear in
children
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, as well as fears of interacting with strangers.
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,
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 will become more faint-hearted and quiet, rather than cheerful and active as other
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 their age. The feeling of aloneness will
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 throughout childhood, and
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 when they reach adulthood, they will not have friends to hang out with. Imagine if the
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's loved ones are no longer with them, who will they confide in if
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 is the only person they can talk to and communicate with. That was a very harmful thing.
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 to having an impact on the psychology of
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, the
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's soft skills and life skills will not be enhanced from spending
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 with their families alone. As a consequence, the child's agility will slowly decline
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 of being quite stagnant and unable to respond when faced with emergency situations. In conclusion, while
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 should spend most of their
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 with their parents, they
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 need more
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 to interact with their peers so that they can develop their social skills. There's a balance between spending
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 with parents and interacting with them since both are vital to the development of
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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