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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As academic learning and vocational training are crucial to the maturity of a child, it is often to see others think teachers’ roles outweigh
parents
 when it comes to
this
 topic. It’s can’t be denied that the influence of teachers is beneficial in the sense of transferring socializing
skills
 and knowledge, but I believe there is more reason why
parents
 have more impact on their kids. To be honest, some people prefer teachers to
parents
 when it comes to teaching
children
 about matters in life and improving their critical thinking. It is understandable mainly because tutors provide knowledge, giving information,
therefore
 contributing a big part to
children
’s intelligence and their social
skills
. With the teacher’s guidance,
children
 can have more
skills
,
for example
, they can learn how to gather data smartly as well as keep themself updated with social news.
However
,
parents
 have more influence on their
children
 when it comes to raising and personalities’ understanding. As a parent, recognizing talents and
children
's potential can be earlier than anybody, for that they can pay attention and invest more on and maximize their intelligence. Sports,
for example
, many
children
 have potential in sports from an early age and without parent’s attention, that talent can be wasted. While teachers teach
children
 subjects
such
 as math, physic, chemist,
parents
 teach them life
skills
such
 as car fixing, cooking. Not only that,
parents
 play a big role in
children
’s manner, teaching them how to act when you are in public, mentor them the basic skill of a human. When
children
 behave badly,
parents
 are said to have failed to educate them. For all of the reasons above, I can strengthen my beliefs that mentors don’t have more impact on
children
 than
parents
 do.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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