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MANY COUNTRIES AIM TO IMPROVE THEIR LIVING STANDARD BY ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT, BUT SOME IMPORTANT SOCIAL VALUES ARE LOST AS A RESULT. DO YOU THINK THE ADVANTAGES OF ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

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Every
country
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 is trying to improve their economic situation in many ways but at the same ,time moral
values
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 are going down. I think the
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 has to maintain the balance between economic growth and social
values
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 of the society.
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 many believe that economic advancement is not in the favour of community as it depletes the social structure of the society but economic growth of any nation is very important because in
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 way folk can live their life in a decent way. If a
country
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 will not focus on
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 development, it could increase the inflation rate of the
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.
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, the per capita income of masses will go down and crime will increase in that particular state.
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, according to
World
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 Trade Organisation, Zimbabwe has one of the highest inflation rates in the
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 due to a lack in their economic policies which is leading them towards poverty and crime. So, if any
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 will not focus on their budget, the crime rate will increase rapidly.
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, it is
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 true that
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 are becoming more selfish because they want luxurious life for themselves at any cost. They do not consider the feelings of other
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. It is happening because
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 are becoming money minded. The love and affection feeling is going down in the whole
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. So, many
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 think that it is happening due to lawmakers, as they are more focusing on businesses rather than social aspects. In my opinion, every nation needs improvement but they consider their national culture to save their ethnicity, uniqueness and more importantly our moral
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. Government can do economic development with their culture too; as they can make their native language an official language, they allow traditional clothes in offices.
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, Saudi Arabia is a developed kingdom they never leave the hand of their language, clothes and even they have Friday as a weekend
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 of Sunday because they for Prayer to Mosque every Friday. In conclusion, economic development never overweighs the social
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 of any
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. So, economic growth and moral
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 should go parallel to run the society in ease from every aspect of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • quality of life
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare
  • education
  • job opportunities
  • unemployment
  • poverty
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • traditional cultural values
  • social bonds
  • material wealth
  • consumerism
  • social inequality
  • environmental conservation
  • wealth gap
  • vulnerable groups
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