Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. “Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose a career path they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?” You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Parenting is not as simple as it may look. There is
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that said
parents
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must not dictate their
children
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to choose a specific profession, and youngsters may have
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a career path they like
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their own way. But the reality is not as
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ideal
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as it may seem. What if the
children
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did not know what they want with their
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? What if the
children
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need
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guidance to achieve their goals? I grew up with a conservative
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who told me what I should do, and what I shouldn’t.
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the beginning, my mom and dad used to have an ideal picture of what kind of
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they would like to become. They told me they did not want to become like their
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who told them what to do and
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what should they become. They would like to be a cooperative
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who won’t put
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pressure on their
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’s
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. But
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time passes by, they see me confused to choose what I would like to do and what would I like to become. So, they begin to suggest
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what should I do and what I shouldn’t about my
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. When I was young, I feel it comfortable and
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that my
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chose what I should do, what kind of major I should take at
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, etc. Here’s my opinion:
Parents
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should not pressure their
children
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to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose a career path they like as long as they know what to become. But, when you don’t know what to do with your
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, I think
parent
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guidance is important
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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