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In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

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In the past, most nations had their own traditional
language
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, which many of them are currently becoming extinct
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 the modernization of the young generation.
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 essay will discuss whether
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 issue is acceptable or should be avoided. On the one hand, the destruction of traditional and old
languages
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 by the young generation can greatly help to make communication between
people
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 of different societies easier. With all
people
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 mastering a few comprehensive
languages
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, anyone anywhere can communicate with another person,
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, as if everyone could speak English.
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, the death of old
languages
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 helps the development of different societies. Many
people
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 have many prejudices about their native
language
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, which sometimes leads to non-native
people
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 not being able to easily settle in that place.
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 sometimes even causes mental problems
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 as depression. On the other side of
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 of a country is like the loss of a large part of the
culture
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 and history of that society. Most of the beautiful values and differences that can be seen between nations are because of their specific
culture
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 and customs, which if they disappear completely, all will remain
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like a world with only one country.
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, The diversity of different
languages
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 makes
people
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 eager to learn them. The desire to learn about a country, its history,
culture
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 and
language
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 is a choice that many
people
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 go towards with interest and it helps the whole world to know what events the planet they live in has experienced.
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, even though the loss of old
languages
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 can help the easy communication and integration of
people
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,
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the history,
culture
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 and what we achieved in the past will be lost, so it is better to try for its survival.
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