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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some communities reckon that a new international
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 should be invented for communication.
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 I think that it maintains some obvious useful consequences, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of using a new international
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 can outweigh its benefits. On the one hand, several reasons could be mentioned that why some want a new
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 which uses all over the world.
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, they claim that we can solve all problems all over the world in
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 way.
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 means that leaders of countries can talk without translators to other leaders and they can solve problems with each other by protecting privacy.
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, they believe that students can take a chance to study a country which they want.
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, these students will get more information about other countries’ education and cultures.
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, there are many reasons why inventing a new
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 cannot be accepted by the majority of populations.
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 of all, if governments want to create a new
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, they should allocate more money from the budget for
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 purpose and it can lead to an obvious problem.
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 means that communities can think that allocating more money to other fields like education and health can give more benefits
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 of inventing a new
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.
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, some crowds especially senior citizens can be reluctant to learn a new
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.
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, if some do not learn
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language
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, as well as, they are reluctant to teach
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language
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 to their children and grandchildren.
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, it is undeniable that already school children have a heavy burden with many lessons and it is no secret that if a new
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 adds their syllabus, they face many problems because of the more and more heavy burden. In conclusion, using a new
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 can lead to some obvious drawbacks, but I believe that owning a new
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 is the best choice and the drawbacks that it brings about can outshine its benefits.
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