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In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. how do you agree with this statement

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Nowadays, especially among youngsters, ancient traditional
languages
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 are becoming extinct. Every year several numbers of traditional and local
languages
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 are unremembered or die. As the world evolves, young
people
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 lose their mother tongue that they don’t care about, and it is a dispensable part of development. On the one hand, young
people
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 lose their interest in using traditional
languages
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;
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 is because the world is moving towards globalization and
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people
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's communication is not only at the local level and they have to be bilingual and turn to other dialects in order to interact with the world. The
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 reason could be that, because the local
language
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 gives fewer opportunities to the society for finding a decent or international business , they are not interested in using it. Nowadays, in the age of science and technology, the efficiency of the local dialect has no place,and young
people
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 must look for a
language
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 to perceive cutting edge science so understanding an international
language
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 become more critical and they gradually stop using their mother tongue or local dialects.
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, many believe that nations and governments should try to keep and preserve local
languages
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 and dialects via different procedures
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 as teaching traditional
languages
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 to students. Still, nothing can prevent the old
languages
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 from becoming alive during the cutting edge are. To conclude,
according
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 globalization ; international
languages
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 must be learned , the government must be able to keep students active in their local
language
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 through proper education
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 by no means new generations will forget their local
language
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 gradually.
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