Some people say that prevent illnesses and diseases, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
Some
people
hold opinion
that Add an article
the opinion
governments
should pay more attention to addressing environmental problems
and housing issues to stop illnesses and diseases
. I do not agree
Add the preposition
onagree
toagree
withagree
this
idea, although
it can be useful in some aspects.
Governments
should pour money into medical
Add an article
the medical
system
, Change the noun form
systems
such
as vaccines and medical check, which is benefical
to Correct your spelling
beneficial
people
’s health. Today technologies have developed rapidly and m many diseases
can be checked in the early in the early
stage, thereby recovering from complaints easily. Those Remove the redundancy
apply
people
who live in the technology world are more likely to check their body problems
by body
check. If they discover the illnesses early, they have opportunities to cure that. Apart from that, Add an article
a body
governments
spend money on vaccination keeping public
far away from Correct article usage
the public
diseases
. For example
, Covid-19 is spread all over the world and there is Correct your spelling
no
not
Correct your spelling
no
treatment
for that. The authority brought vaccines from medical companies and argue Add an article
a treatment
people
taking shots. People
who get vaccine
is Add an article
the vaccine
a vaccine
total
free and Replace the word
totally
that is
the
good way to control the virus.
Another method of Correct article usage
a
prevent
illnesses is that the Change the verb form
preventing
government
should improve public’s
Correct article usage
the public’s
healthy
awareness. In a competitive society, most Replace the word
health
of
Change preposition
apply
people
devote their time to working leading under strain. Those who have sub-health because they have to keep the same action for Add an article
the people
long
time, Add an article
a long
such
as sitting before computers. If people
do not care this
situation, it will cause serious Change preposition
about this
problems
even death. The government
should help people
to raise the
awareness by social media or establishing laws. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, the government
regulate employers which can not ask employees work
over 40 hours per week so those policies can keep Fix the infinitive
to work
people
having awareness of healthy
Replace the word
health
problems
and people
are more likely to follow the
good lifestyle.
Correct article usage
a
On the other hand
, people
can keep diseases
away by reducing environmental pollution
and housing issues because of avoiding Add an article
the virus
virus
. With the Fix the agreement mistake
viruses
urbanalisation
and economic boost, there Correct your spelling
urbanisation
urbanization
are
an increasing number of private cars and residential Change the verb form
is
building
, which causes Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
pollution
, especially smoggy. As a result
, the government
should keep watchful eye on reducing biological and housing pollution
on private cars and develop eco-friendly cars and on building materials which
are less damage to the environment.
In a conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
that
governments
should have various methods to deal with diseases
and decreasing
Wrong verb form
decrease
pollution
and housing problems
just
only two ways among different policies.Change preposition
in just
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