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Some people think newspaper are the most effective way to get the latest information and it has a stronger influence than other forms of media on us. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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agrue
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argue
agree
 that reading newspapers is the best
way
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 to have
news
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 and
information
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 among other methods of
press
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. I do not support
this
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 idea,
although
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 it has some advantages.
Newspaper
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 outlets sometimes publish fake
news
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 because they focus on economic revenue. Those who earn
benefits
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benefit
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 by selling advertisements so they focus on exposure rather than
quality
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 of
news
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. Some
people
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 who work in
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newspaper
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 industry may exaggerate
news
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 even write fake
news
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 to attract the public.
People
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 can not get
latest
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 and
truth
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news
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 from
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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. Another disadvantage of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 is that
people
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 only can read the literacy
information
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. As a traditional method of releasing
news
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, paper spread
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news
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 by writing articles. In
this
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way
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, it can not show all the details about the whole story, and it any cause consequences that readers can not get full of
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.
In contrast
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, some other forms of media,
such
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 as
youtobe
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youtube
,
online
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 BBC website and
facebook
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, release
news
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 with videos and links which are related to the
news
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, thereby reporting
news
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 precisely.
People
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also
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 can watch
these
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news
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in
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 phones or computers immediately
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 of going to shops to buy
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a newspaper
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. Watching online
news
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 is more efficient and it is cost-effective.
On the other hand
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is a good
way
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 of getting messages since it can offer all kinds of
news
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. Newspapers always cover numerous
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of
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 our lives,
such
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 as economy, politician, sport and so forth.
People
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 have access to acquire daily
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 by reading
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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. As a traditional
way
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 of media,
newspaper
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have
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long
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 history and it has
own
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their own
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 resources, and
therefore
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newspaper
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 companies can get
latest
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the latest
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information
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 quickly. In conclusion, today
people
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 have different ways
to
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 collecting
news
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, especially online
news
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 and it is convenient and easy. Compared to online
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, reading
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 is time-consuming and it can not offer whole details about
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news
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 because of its drawbacks.

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