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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country , while others believe government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The gap between rich and poor has been growing throughout the
last
 century. Some individuals perceive it as a positive development for the country,
however
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 others think that it is the
government
's responsibility to restrict the earnings of rich
people
.
This
 essay will discuss the debate, and explain why I believe that limitation of income by governments is a utopian idea and would not succeed. On one hand, the profit
people
 in the country make the better it is for the economy. In most cases wealthy
people
 are those who own companies,
thus
 they are able to procure capital, improve technologies, grow and expand.
This
 allows them to create more workplaces for other layers of the society and increase productivity, which grows the economy. On the opposite side, the
government
’s restrictions on income would decrease the gap between wealthy and poor
people
,
therefore
, make everyone equal in an economic sense. Similar opportunities for each person
,
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 would mean that every individual has a chance for success, despite their status.
This
 perception would help
people
 to believe in themselves and work hard to prosper. In my point of view, when the
government
 puts a limit on an individual’s earnings it becomes a utopia, and history demonstrated that
this
 kind of system would be a failure. The communistic political and economic system of
government
 promotes the idea of social and economic equality among its citizens. Unfortunately, in the example of the USSR world’s society witnessed that the system of economic equality only leads to corruption.
Thus
, controlling the profits of its citizens is not a reliable method for decreasing economic inequality for the
government
. In conclusion, the economic prosperity of certain
people
 helps the country to develop.
Although
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 the idea of limitation of earnings seems to solve the problem of having a disproportionately high amount of
people
 who have low income, history showed that it is not viable.
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