Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, the competition between every company is higher. Advertising
becomes
one of the crucial Wrong verb form
has become
method
for encouraging Change to a plural noun
methods
people
to purchase their products. However
, some individuals believe that this
technique cannot help for increasing
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to increase
the
sales. Both ideas have their own supporting reasons which are Correct article usage
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essay.
On the one hand, advertisements by the
famous celebrities can make their fan clubs spend a huge amount of money to buy things that Correct article usage
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they
are not necessary or even useless Correct pronoun usage
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product
because they want to support their favourite idol. The effectiveness of Fix the agreement mistake
products
this
marketing measure can be proven in the highest sales rate of products selling
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well known
artists. To illustrate, even though the Add a hyphen
well-known
economy
situation is terrible, the sales of Replace the word
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smart phone
which is advertised by Correct your spelling
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celebrity still significantly rises up and reaches Correct article usage
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peak Correct pronoun usage
their
while
the other commodities without advertising cannot be sold. Moreover
, advertising offers more opportunities for people
to know a
new merchandise. Without advertisements, it is difficult for them to notice whether the latest product is launched.
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On the other hand
, advertising is being ignored and skipped. People
usually change to other channels while
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advertisement
or when it Correct article usage
an advertisement
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pops
while
they are watching a movie on the internet, they automatically click to the skip botton
in order to continue the enjoyment. It means that Correct your spelling
button
this
commercial method cannot be used for encouraging
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to encourage
people
to purchase things anymore.
In conclusion, personally
I agree that advertisement plays an important role in persuading Add a comma
personally,
people
to buy things because it not only provide the latest information but also
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is also
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supporting feelings for the idol.Correct article usage
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