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Some people believe that everyone has right to university education. Therefore, government should make university education free for everyone, no matter what their financial background is. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays having a higher
education
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 degree is an essential factor to achieve a good job position in several fields. Some
people
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 argue that governments are responsible for providing free
university
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education
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 for everyone.
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 I think
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 is a good idea, I believe it is impossible in many
countries
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 because of some important problems. On the one hand, I believe the financial background of
people
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 should not affect their opportunity for higher
education
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. because the value of every single individual in society is equal, so governments should treat  them equally.
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 school levels is free in most
countries
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 and
people
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 consider it as a right, no matter how much money they have. So it can be a good idea for
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countries
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 to provide
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 same conditions in higher
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.
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, in many
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 because of the limitation of overall budget and expenses of
university
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education
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, 
higher
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education
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 budget is low.
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 authorities have to select a limited number of students for free
university
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education
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 based on their educational background.
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 applications in some fields of study
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 as medical science are much more than the capacities of universities and the job market, so a  competition based on their educational ability and background should be necessary. In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that governments should allow everyone to go to
university
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 for free, but except some developed
countries
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, it is impossible for other
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 to execute
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 valuable idea
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