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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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Despite the
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high-price
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 of a
home
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 or an apartment, people in some countries strive to buy a house over renting one. I think
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 appeared due to people’s desire
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 stability and calmness, which can be achieved with the help of private real estate. I believe
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 trend is positive
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 because owning a
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 is
asset
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an asset
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 for
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future life.
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 with, personal accommodation let people
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be sure
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 the future holds. Owners of flats or houses do not have to worry about increasing
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renting prices or about an unfriendly renter.
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, my sister and her husband were renting a flat for a year. In August
owner
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the owner
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 of the flat suddenly informed my sister’s family, that they have to find another apartment and move out in one month. My sister barely has found a new flat in
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 little time.
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 situation would not have happened
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 if my sister's family had lived in their own housing.
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comfort
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the comfort
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 of living in your own accommodation, owning a
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 can be a great investment in the future. Prices for apartments are rising annually, so in ten
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 twenty years the same flat will cost much more. And in the case of selling
it
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 owners can get more money than they spent on buying that real estate.
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, in Russia in
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 six
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 prices for housing is growing steadily. So real estate agencies, who bought the flats in 2014, are now selling them for twice as much. In conclusion, owning a house can make your life more stable and easier.
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, a personal flat or a
home
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 is a profitable investment for you or your kids.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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