Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?
Sports activity supports the health of elderly
people
, which is why doctors try to involve elderly patients in such
processes. Unfortunately, many elderlies neglect that recommendation because they not only do not believe in the effectiveness of fitness
but also
try to avoid uncomfortable or painless experiences. There are two main solutions to this
situation which will be provided in this
essay.
Firstly
, people
do not trust that sports exercises are something meaningful in their life. In other words
, there is some misconception that fitness
can not help in terms of healing diseases. Especially, this
is regular for elderly people
who have not had such
a positive history during their life, despite many people
experiencing vivid relief during their regular sports training such
as normalisation of blood pressure or recovery of back pain. One of the most important things to have a serious effect on persuading people
is motivational movies of real people
who recovered from serious diseases. For instance
, such
movies as "Legend 17" or "The Time of Firsts" can stimulate people
and incentivise them to regular fitness
. Due to
this
, such
encouragement can be part of a recovery program.
Secondly
, old people
have a lot of discomfort during any kind of moving. It can be problems with their bones, muscles or heart. Thus
, they try to avoid painless exercises which were recommended by doctors. Especially such
things happen very often with people
who break a bone or have some muscle trauma. One of the best solutions, in this
case, this
case is the well-organised process of training for the elderly. Moreover
, such
training can be supervised by a special medicine coach. For example
, my mum broke her arm and during the recovery process, she visited a special medicine gymnastics class, which helped her a lot.
To sum up
, despite special fitness
exercises being quite effective for elderlies to be in better shape or recover faster, many of them do not trust or avoid uncomfortable activities. However
old people
can be encouraged by special motivational programs or supported by well well-managed process of training for the elderly.Submitted by tarasovnn on
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