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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Several learners are
also
 doubling as workers which see them focusing less on the schooling and generally being overwhelmed.
This
 essay discusses why
this
 is the case and how these challenges can be ameliorated. Reports of employed students feeling under pressure could be attributed to the demands of their workstation or their inability to manage their schedules.
First
, certain jobs and bosses can be so hard, requiring optimum concentration and output. It becomes tough, in
such
 a scenario, to invest attention in personal studies given the need for a salary at the end of the month.
Second
, some people are just not good at time management and struggle to juggle between schooling and working. Eventually, they find themselves overloaded and unable to cope.
For instance
, when I did distance education, I always received low grades not because I was dull, but due to the fact that I could not make enough time to research for exams and write assignments. To resolve these conundrums, those affected can consider stopping either employment or learning or choosing to study over longer periods.
Firstly
, focusing only on, say, education, would allow one to be more effective and attain the best results than trying to do two things simultaneously.
Secondly
, distributing courses over, say, a 10-year duration, which will make one concentrate effectively in their job while
also
 handling enough academic material to succeed in their studies.
For example
, a debate in the USA once said that many working PhD students usually render that they are not worried about finishing, and
this
 is their way of reducing the pressure of doing both activities simultaneously. To sum it up, when employed learners cry about the challenges and pressure at school, it's likely because their workplaces require the most from them or because of their failure to structure personal timetables well. The solutions to
this
 are letting one go, between schooling and jobs, and distributing their education over long durations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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