The detailed description about crime will affect the people and cause many social problems. Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, society is prone to detailed information about criminal issues by different types of social
media
and mass
media
.
Although
I believe that the detailed description
about
Change preposition
of
show examples
crime
in the
media
should be controlled ,because of the resulting social problems,
people
should know about
this
kind of  reality in a controlled way. On the one hand, uncontrolled news which reports criminal
activities
in detail would have severe mental effects on the public. Because
people
could either become coward or aggressive
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and due to the variety of
media
,
consequently
these mental problems and misbehaviours affect the whole society.
In addition
, in the age of the
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
internet it is easier  than ever for children to follow
this
type of news via their smartphones, which can damage their perspective of safety in the world so limitations and monitoring criminal content on social
media
are crucial.
On the other hand
, having  knowledge about criminal
activities
is essential for
people
,because it helps them keep themselves safe. controlled description of
crime
in the
media
can help
people
to improve their awareness.
For example
, if
people
are informed which parts of a city are not safe at night, it convinces them not to stay out late in those areas.
In addition
, awareness helps
people
to  abstain from
activities
that can lead to
crime
.
For instance
,
media
can show the dark sides of all
activities
that can persuade adolescents for money, and abstain them from committing crimes. In conclusion,
although
criminal detailed information in the
media
can lead to severe social issues, using
media
to inform
people
about
crime
in a controlled way is essential.
Submitted by cena.m.89 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: