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Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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After 12 years in
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, it is normal for to
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 have a
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year
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 before going to
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, in which they can travel or have work experience. Personally, I think that it may offer benefits to the individual when they return to education.
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 essay will describe both views and provide them with examples. On the one hand, it is not sensibly to lose a
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 between
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 and
university
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. The losing of one
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 can involve forgetting basic education,
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 as features of triangles in geometry or elementary laws in physics. According to the book "How to change your thinking",
people
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 which were not repeating the materials for more than six months, forget them.
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,
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 which finished
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 and have a
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year
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 could use it for starting a career in future.
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, having a
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year
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 can give worthy opportunities. Many
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 use
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 time for travelling with friends or family.
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,
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 which travel with close humans, can build a good relationship with them, find new friends, see different cultures and traditions, and
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 relax. By relaxing from travelling,
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 will have a clear mind, which helps to a good start of studying in
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. Because
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universities demand from
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 volunteer hours and work experience,
people
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 can take one
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, and it will help them in admission to the
university
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. In conclusion, having a
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year
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 before starting studying at
university
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 help
students
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 because it gives them time to relax, experience work, and volunteer hours, which help to excellent starting in
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. So, I agree that
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 between
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 and
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 is a good benefit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Non-academic life
  • Resume
  • Job market
  • Personal development
  • Broaden their worldviews
  • Academic pressures
  • Renewed focus
  • Loss of academic momentum
  • Career goals
  • Informed decisions
  • Soft skills
  • Communication
  • Problem-solving
  • Adaptability
  • Financial burden
  • Prolonged break
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