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Scientific research can be the most effective when done by private companies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Most technologies we are using today are based and developed from scientific researches. Some believe that these studies will be more powerful when they are done by profit-oriented private companies. I will explain why I’m fully against
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 essay. Scientific researches do not always have potential payback.
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, the law of gravity, which is discovered by newton with his passion and interest in nature, has never made a single penny. For that reason, private companies are not likely to invest in monitoring stars for decades before a single natural law comes out. In a word, scientific researches are always interest-driven, not money-driven, and meant to find a norm of nature.
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, whether research is effective depends on its importance, not how much money it can make or who developed it.
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, those well-known theories and laws,
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 as maxwell’s equations, relativity theory, e.g., are effective because they explain how the cosmos is working. Technical researches are based on the law of how things work and
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 make a usable product. So, whether research is done by a private company is not associated with its effectiveness. To sum up, scientific researches are always universal, which makes it not that ‘efficient’ to invest in a private company or group that specializes in a particular field. So on one hand, these researches are usually done by non-profit organizations,
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 as universities.
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, whether it is effective is none of the business to who did it, but what it is.
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