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Nowadays human activities have had negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem while others argue that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, considering global warming, pollution, and many other humanitarian problems, environmental issues have become a very popular topic of discussion. First of all, human activities have had considerable negative effects on plants and animal
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe that it is never too late to fix these problems
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 and that humans can take effective measures to improve the situation. One important step is to reduce pollution caused by factories and other human activities.
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 would have a strong positive influence on the natural environment.
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 human actions, many animal
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 are endangered, which is a very serious problem.
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, others argue that it may already be too late to do anything because many
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 have become extinct
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 of human activities. They believe that the damage done to nature is too serious and cannot be fully repaired.
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 view, destroyed ecosystems cannot be restored, and animals that have disappeared will never return.
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, some
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 think that governments and individuals can still protect the environment by reducing pollution and saving endangered
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. In my opinion, we must take action to protect nature, including both flora and fauna. I strongly believe that it is never too late to make positive changes.
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 can become volunteers, take part in environmental
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, plant trees, and help protect endangered animals. Personally, I try to do my best to protect nature, and I believe that if more
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 get involved, we can still save our planet. In the 21st century, there are many
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 that care about the environment, and governments are
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 taking steps to protect animal
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Make your view clear in the introduction and in the end. State your own opinion as a firm line.
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Give more clear reasons and real examples for each idea. Do not stay only on broad talk.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas are linked and to move from one idea to the next.
coherence
Keep ideas in a paragraph focused on one main point. Shorter sentences can help.
structure
The plan is clear: intro, view points, and a final opinion.
coherence
There are good link words that help flow.
content
The writer gives an opinion and repeats it.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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