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Some people think that in the future lots of changes will occur that will improve our society. Do you agree or disagree? What kind of changes will occur?

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Some
people
 feel that developments are going to happen in the years to come that will make our life better. I totally agree with
this
 idea and believe that there are lots of
changes
 in
technological
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 field. The main reason why I am of
this
 opinion is that
people
 do not have to often work manually to make a living thanks to these advances. It is reasonable to say that it can save
time
, reduce human
labour power
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 and increase work productivity. One good illustration of
this
 is that
instead
 of working hard from morning to evening, waitresses can use modern specialized machines like robots to serve dishes to customers. It is
also
 to say that the upcoming
changes
 will provide
people
 with much more exciting means of entertainment, which enables humans to relieve stress significantly. It is not something delusional when
people
 are likely to experience
the
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life under the sea with the support of modern devices and applications. These
changes
 will mostly take place in
technology
. In terms of household chores, there is a likelihood that technological advances will enable us to control our housework.
For instance
, we do not need to wash the dishes, clean the floor due to the
time - saving
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technology
 like dishwashers, and robotic vacuum cleaners, which allows us to have more free
time
 to take a rest. Regarding entertainment, it is likely that there will be more and more
theaters
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 using 5D
technology
, which bring interesting experiences to viewers.
Similarly
, smart or
high - tech
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 televisions operated by remote control
technology
 will become more prevalent in
the
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households around the world. In conclusion, our society will become more civilized, and have better forms of entertainment with the help of
technology
. The most likely
changes
 appeared to be technologies to save us
time
 and
also
 enhance our leisure
time
.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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